The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The graph illustrates the need for electricity in England during specific days in summer and winter seasons. The pie chart compares the use of electricity in four different purposes.
Overall, it can been seen that the demand of electricity in winter is considerably higher than that in summer. And heating remains the primary consumption of electricity.
During winter, the requirement of electricity ranges from 30000 to 44000 units, compared to summer from 12000 to 20000 units only. The urge of electricity typically hits a peak at around 10 pm in winter (42000 units), whereas it is the afternoon (2 pm) for summer (20000 units). Surprisingly, both spells reach a low in the morning at around 8:30 am.
Heating rooms and heating water stand at slightly over half (52.5%) of the total, followed by Ovens, Kettles and washing machines at approximately one fifth (17.5%). Interestingly, the rest two 'lighting, TV, radio' and 'Vacuum cleaners, food mixers, electric tools' contribute 15% each .
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flaws:
some more details for the first graph wanted, like:
Looking at the detail, the electricity demand in summer is reckoned between 10,000 – 20,000 units. It goes to around 12,000 before 9 am and slightly increases to around 20,000 at 14 pm and relatively fluctuates until the rest of the day. However, in winter, the electricity requisition sets about 35,000 units at 00 am and gradually spikes before it actually rises at 9 am and keeps the level swells until around 45,000 units at 23 pm.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 161 200
No. of Characters: 794 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.562 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.858 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.111 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.404 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[4]
Message: Did you mean 'can be' or 'has been'?
Suggestion: can be; has been
...four different purposes. Overall, it can been seen that the demand of electricity in ...
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Line 7, column 279, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...xers, electric tools contribute 15% each .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21875 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.859855585 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68125 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4566187205 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7777777778 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.22222222222 5.23603664747 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294193149006 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119877206098 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113410478329 0.0843802449381 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187057901957 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141375885778 0.0819641961636 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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