Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence?
The question of whether heritability or environments would be responsible for human intelligence is very topical today,as the cleverness of a person can largely influence the development of a country.There are valid arguments on both sides,which I will discuss and conclude the most significant factor I prefer now.
On the one hand,supporters of parental intelligence point out the tendency of intelligent couples having offspring with the same intellect.To attest this,a majority of scientists have developed and carried out numerous researches,and as a result,has proven that the gene which has been inherited from parents will provide instruction to construct brain and nervous system to influence the offspring’s brainpower.Lastly,it is often said that if intelligent mother previously spent time reading books as her leisure activity, without any negative sense, she would indirectly introduce academic cognition with a sense of pleasure to her unborn child.
On the other hand,though,one major influence of environmental factors is that it helps to foster an individual's intellectual growth.For instance,it is notable that people living in the city would normally have more problem-solving abilities and social cognition compared to those in the village. The reason is that they have to frequently deal with many complex problems in the city, such as traffic congestion, over pollution, or having to communicate successfully with persons from multicultural society.Futhermore,supporters of this side emphasize quality and quantity of learning in the school as a part of individual’s environment would also encourage young persons to gain cognitive abilities. This is especially true since comprehensive learning, one of the methods in the school to master relation among distinct subjects, has assisted students to discriminate between sources and sift information to marshal their facts.
To conclude,i feel that intelligent persons are mostly influenced by their environments especially in the school.Of course,this is provided that students are given a wide range of subjects in the curriculum to widen their insights
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, so, for instance, i feel, of course, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89776357827 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.69784534045 2.80592935109 132% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651757188498 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 20.2975951904 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.898842429 49.4020404114 295% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 307.666666667 106.682146367 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.1666666667 20.7667163134 251% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.6666666667 7.06120827912 222% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216001711196 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100579559749 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571856120774 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133695305314 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414440130698 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.4 13.0946893788 247% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.78 50.2224549098 4% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 11.3001002004 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.83 12.4159519038 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.97 8.58950901804 139% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.1190380762 225% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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