Some people believe that the purpose of education is to prepare people to be useful members of society. Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is often argued that the objective of schools is to cultivate an ideal citizen for society, whereas some people believe that getting individuals ready for their aspirations should be the main focus of schools. This essay discusses both sides of this argument, and then I will give my own perspective.
There are two merits of schools focusing on training useful members of society. First, If young people are better prepared for their social awareness through schooling, society will become more civilized as well as developed. This is because when acquiring more knowledge that will benefit society, everyone is more likely to be aware of the country’s laws and regulations, and they are inclined to follow those procedures. Second, by schools preparing individuals for their working lives, there will be a better-prepared workforce. This benefits society by raising productivity and ensuring that employers have the necessary labor they need.
However, there are also advantages of the education system focusing on assisting individuals in achieving their ambitions. First of all, education needs to satisfy the dreams of students by allowing them to show their potential talents. This means that the educational environment helps individuals better grasp their own targets and meets adequate know-how in fulfilling their ambition. For instance, If the student desires to become a successful artist in the future, they should be taught in-depth subjects such as music or art. Furthermore, many of us have different preferences and I think people can achieve more if they do what they like. For example, if they study what they want, they will have more passion to learn it and master the subject they study.
In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, it seems that schools should focus on training useful members of society. This is because if the students are well-prepared for their social awareness, they will be more successful in their lives and contribute more to society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3198757764 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7732084593 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3221868034 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0625 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0625 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159043902959 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602944529023 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299521039366 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108718903663 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225998246897 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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