Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.
I would like to agree with the statement above. In fact, the great businessmen in the world were categorized as a hard worker. As an examples, Thomas Alfa Edison, a former great entrepreneur and outstanding inventor should do 1000 experiments for inventing electrical lamp. Donald Alfero, the owner of Starbuck Cafe which have 10,000 branches in European regions has sent 2500 investment proposals to Angle Investors for getting funding. The first richest man in the world, Bill Gates, should spent 25 years for making the biggest technology industry in the world. Christiano Ronaldo, the most expensive football player have been practicing his skills for 12 hours a day.
Furthermore, hard work behavior which also called as workacholic not only success in increasing amount of interests, but also growing up individual confidence and happiness level. According to the data from Centre of Behavioral Psychology, University of Oxford illustrated that 80% people who categorized as a workacholic are happier than workers in general.
Nevertheless, the World Health Organization (WHO) suggested that hard work behavior should be balanced with sport activity by allocating 1 of 12 work ours for physical exercises. Without doing that, we would be easily depressed.
In my conclusion, hard work activity should cultivate to everyone, due to hard work is the significant activity for making better life and bright future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an example' or simply 'examples'?
Suggestion: an example; examples
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 221.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45248868778 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91860465069 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.696832579186 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0194519814 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.545454545 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137313626508 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502553109837 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395856706906 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873069960696 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241809909607 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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