It is argued that technological advances have more issues than benefits. While technology improvements can promote sedentary lifestyles, I believe that they will facilitate users in terms of education and work.
Undoubtedly, advanced technology can encourage inactive lifestyles among individuals. More specifically, the innovative technologies in computers allow users to engage in a vast majority of website platforms regarding movies, video games, and music rather than outdoor activities. According to a survey in 2020, Vietnamese students preferred playing computer games after school hours to engaging in physical activities, which results in an increase in health issues such as obesity and eye shortening.
However, technological advancements can enhance users’ experience in the following aspects. Chief of these is that the proliferation of computer-based learning courses enables learners to access lessons and materials whenever they want for a cheap fee. Conversely, students who opt for traditional education are bound by fixed class schedules and are burdened with substantial expenses for tuition fees, textbooks, and school facilities on a monthly basis, resulting in limited flexibility and increased financial strain. Furthermore, technological improvements have improved efficiency and productivity in the workplace. In reality, office workers have currently communicated with their clients or co-workers via email in minutes regardless of places and times, whereas it took much time to do it in a few past decades. Consequently, this allows people to improve their work performance and outcomes.
In conclusion, while it is acknowledged that technological innovation may pose challenges for modern societies, such as promoting sedentary lifestyles, I remain optimistic that its potential to enhance education and employment outweighs the drawbacks. Furthermore, judicious utilization of these advancements based on genuine needs can lead to maximum benefits for individuals.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.08480565371 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32211107288 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681978798587 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1266404012 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.461538462 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156909752488 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548054078567 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372389362888 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976768058041 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288274919293 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.98 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.32 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.