Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports for younger children).
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Recently, our society have been becoming competitive society. Thus, most students have been trying to obtain how to compete on society from kids and plenty of students are studying for competition today as well. However, some people believe that it will bring many problems and we have to educate them moral programs first in school such as working for charity, voluntary program for neighborhoods etc.
To begin with, by teaching them unpaid community service in school, it will be able to bring many positive effects for society. Firstly, students who join voluntary program in school will learn and experience about morality and humanism. Consequently, it will be helpful for society a lot. because a rate of teenager's crime have been increasing nowadays. I think that the cause is that we educate them wrong in school and society. Therefore, by providing some voluntary programs in school for students, it will help to prevent numerous problems of teenagers. In addition, by giving voluntary programs to students, they can learn about cooperative mind. I think it is quite worthwhile in society.
On the other hand, there are also some disadvantages. If school adds some programs that i mentioned instead of compulsory subjects such as science, language, mathematics etc, they will lose their time to study. As a result, they might fall behind competition in the future when they graduate and go to university. From the point of view of the nation, it can be seen that it is one of the demerit.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks, the programs such as working for charity, being volunteer should exist for students in school. Because we have to educate students moral things first. Also, I think that it is most important and worthwhile. Hence, I agree that unpaid community service should be a required part of high school programs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08496732026 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70521130892 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516339869281 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4820322883 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8947368421 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1052631579 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269753332954 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813420823422 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101517828659 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179265821723 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947815210568 0.056905535591 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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