At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently, some countries have more young populations than old populations. Also, it is frequently believed that it has plenty of the advantages than the disadvantages, if there are more young people than old people in country. I totally agree about this opinion and I believe that the merits of this situation outweigh the demerits.

To begin with, it is considered by many that we can expect many advantages, if there are many young people in country. Firstly, the situation that the country has numerous young people means that they have a lot of labors. Furthermore, a number of labors will be able to bring the advance of the nation. Because, young populations can contribute to develop the nation. In addition, in the case of countries that don't have many young populations relatively, they may have some problems. One of the reason why the many countries care about birth rate is also in order to prevent this problems. For instance, birth rate have been decreasing in Korea, Japan and many experts announced that this situation will make numerous problems in the future consequently such as decreasing labors, depression of economy etc. Thus, many people believe that the countries should care and provide policies about this problems.

Meanwhile, if the counties have many young people, compared with old people, there is drawback as well. The numerous number of young population may bring serious competition in the country. Because, many young people will want to enter better universities, better companies. As a result, a lot of young people have to compete each other.

In conclusion, although there is disadvantage, I believe that the merits outweigh demerits. Because, the nations need plenty of labors always for development and the less labor may block the progress of the country.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14965986395 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72960402227 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465986394558 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.54771636 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0588235294 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2941176471 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58823529412 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213593320742 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785732432275 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476121877055 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127598391758 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616546595487 0.056905535591 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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