Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, there has been a controversy over the issue of forcing high school students to engage in voluntary activities. In fact, some people argue that such activities, such as teaching to younger and working as a fund-raiser for donation, should become part of their school curriculum to oblige pupils to take part. I, however, do not believe this measure would bring positive effects neither for students or society.

First of all, students should get involved in communal activities with great encouragement and in this case impetus and enthusiasm have been excluded. Consequently, not only students would not enjoy and learn, but the result of the work would not make any significant change to the community. In addition, this unsuccessful effort might leave the participants with a unsatisfying memory which prevent them from joining any voluntary work later on.

Second of all, children should be taught to make money from the very young age by choosing a work that appeal to them. Nevertheless, this unpaid, uninteresting responsibility would not seem to be beneficial for their future careers. For example, a young person interested in accounting should be given the opportunity to join banks or financial organizations to handle some simple accounting tasks while making a small salary. In this situation, the student would learn a profession which s/he might opt as an occupation and more importantly they experience the sense of satisfaction by earning their first salary.

In conclusion, including voluntary tasks as a mandatory part of high school course does not seem wise enough because they could be in opposite direction to students' attraction and inspiration, and would not prepare youngsters for their future occupations. Therefore, voluntaries should stay optional and students should have freedom to choose what kind of contribution they would like to make to their society.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'nor' with neither.
Suggestion: nor
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38127090301 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94915394247 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588628762542 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4319716985 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.083333333 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0833333333 7.06120827912 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213917793487 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792398290836 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604769010579 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133451257396 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732041996116 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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