Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children.Do you agree or disagree?

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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children.
Do you agree or disagree?

Over the past few years, computers have integrated into people's lives, especially for young people. However, it is argued that utilizing this machine daily would have adverse effects on the youngs. In this essay, I shall elaborate in favor of this controversial issue.
First of all, according to a most recent research, which has been carried out in the US on a great number of children under 10 years of age, it has been claimed that those who look at a screen more than two hours each day would have a smaller brains. Therefore, it is suggested children's access to computers, mobile phone and generally equipment which employs a screen should be limited to up to two hours in order to prevent any interference with their brains' growth.
Second, the youngs who computer is part of their everyday lives suffer short attention span more than peers who work with computer infrequently. In fact, since computer allows people to benefit from wide variety of software, the user usually would not be able to concentrate on one task and instead they change from one application to the other and it result in a sort of confusion and distraction problem.
Third, common physical problems, such as backache and eye strain, which most of the office worker usually complain about, might appear soon in a child's life. Although this problem might be solved, or at least mitigated, by using standard chairs and especial glasses, there a minority who provide standard situation before working with computer and exposing to screen with ultraviolet rays.
In conclusion, allowing children to spend a huge amount of their time in front of screens, whether for surfing and playing games or studying an e-book, would be a huge mistake because it cause brain problems, short attention span and physical difficulties. Thus, I believe the computer usage should be supervised and limited to a certain amount of time by parents.

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Average: 9 (2 votes)

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...to a certain amount of time by parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, third, thus, at least, in conclusion, in fact, sort of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98746081505 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58969841258 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626959247649 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.5166309848 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.636363636 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158575294324 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569135093772 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535321136647 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786835826521 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377689366067 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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