Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Generally speaking, high school students should get outdoor programs which can improve soft skill especially helping unpaid community services. They usually study in the school every single day so they usually feel bored because they just do regular studying. However, helping other people for a charity may help them having fun rather than going to school regularly.
Community services actually have lots of programs to improve their environment. One of the most benefits for surroundings is cleaning and decorating their neighborhood to get ADIPURA AWARD which held every year to improve many counties in Indonesia. With help from high school students this program will success in their neighborhood near by their school besides the students will get some extracurricular to tackle boredom in the class.
Teaching sports to educate mostly younger children will help high school student to adapt easily to their society around their school because community usually assume that most of high school student always be introvert, in a group, or just study and going home which in other word the never interact with communities around them. So, when they close with younger children they will close with their communities too.
At last, unpaid community service ought to be a compulsory subject of high school student. This subject will increase not only their soft skill but also their respect of each other in their surroundings.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to have' or 'have'.
Suggestion: to have; have
...ther people for a charity may help them having fun rather than going to school regular...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 334, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...gram will success in their neighborhood near by their school besides the students will ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... interact with communities around them. So, when they close with younger children they w...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1208.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32158590308 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50144246069 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577092511013 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.326082186 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237757974517 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106396431299 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062999000871 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148710161423 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191342933567 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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