Some people believe that unpaid volunteer work should be a requirement of high school curriculum
To what extent do you agree or disagree
The fundamental purpose of our education system is not only restricted to thrive academic knowledge but also to offer children’s personality development. Some people consider that every secondary school ought to conduct an unpaid volunteer work such as working for a charity, as a part of students’ curricular activities. I entirely agree with this perspective as it is needed for their skills development and inspire them to contribute to the society.
The conventional syllabus designed to focus on their academic performance, even though the recent innovative learning system, which involve volunteer work to bolster skills. Practically, this phenomenon started at the experimental basis and the anticipated results were positive, therefore these activties are in practice now. In Australia, for instance, the church gardening mission is carried out, which involved high school students who work in the team to grow plants around the church, as a result they develop positive attitude. In fact, these programs encourage students to work in a team; hence, they acquire abilities such as teamwork, collaboration, acceptence of the diversity, respect the teammates, and open-minded attitude.
Another benefit is that it is a way to make student to be a better member of community and also understand the significance of public services. Raising awareness over the climate change or supporting victims the against cyber bullying are some of many programs that are conducted by students in order to address many social issues, certainly, these involvement not only make their resumes look better but also help them to gain experience. If the young adults do not care about society the future of the it will be uncertain. Hence the aim of these contribution is to
Overall, despite the stressful academic syllabus, the volunteer projects develop a skilled generation and a better society with better people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wledge but also to offer children's personality development. Some people con...
^^
Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h as working for a charity, as a part of students' curricular activities. I ...
^^
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ms encourage students to work in a team; hence, they acquire abilities such as te...
^^
Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this involvement' or 'these involvements'?
Suggestion: this involvement; these involvements
... address many social issues, certainly, these involvement not only make their resumes look better...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... but also help them to gain experience. If the young adults do not care about soci...
^^
Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...do not care about society the future of the it will be uncertain. Hence the aim of the...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...the future of the it will be uncertain. Hence the aim of these contribution is to ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this contribution' or 'these contributions'?
Suggestion: this contribution; these contributions
... it will be uncertain. Hence the aim of these contribution is to Overall, despite the stressfu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 568, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence the aim of these contribution is to Overall, despite the stressful academic ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, second, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48484848485 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02687048389 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62962962963 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7155411654 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.090909091 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14479702446 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513917036829 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567794477817 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778727238015 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433076480501 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.