Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Gender equality at work has been a difficult issue to deal with in many countries. While some think that there should be equal chances of employment for both men and women in armed forces especially, I support those who argue that the latter is not suitable for such jobs.
On the one hand, supporters might argue in favor of women working in the military forces for two main reasons. First and foremost, everyone should have equal chances for equal employment no matter what position it is. Depriving one a chance to pursue a dream may stifle their motivation to work, and consequently lead to poor performance in their other chosen area because they tend to have a reluctant attitude. Thus, if women choose to be police officers, they should be supported instead of being discouraged. Moreover, the gentle sex is proven to have better forensic instincts and on average higher intelligence than their male counterparts. Therefore, giving them a chance to work in police intelligence departments, for example, is likely to be productive.
However, I side with those who believe that they are not suited for these jobs for a few reasons. Initially, it is true that the police undergo intensive training and practice in fields under extreme weather conditions, which are difficult barriers for women to overcome due to their physically weaker bodies. Secondly, females tend to be emotionally vulnerable. In especially serious operations, say dealing with recidivists, they might not be cold-blooded enough to apply weapons, if necessary. Ultimately, because the police work involves the security and safety of people, in no way will it be sensible to employ those who are emotionally and physically unsuitable for the position just to achieve a statistically perfect balance.
In conclusion, although some might argue that there should an equal number of women working in the military, I agree with those who think that they do not match the criteria mentioned above to make them suitable candidates for the armed forces.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14848484848 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80845666404 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4434577613 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.357142857 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247949592564 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846338867118 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882943054018 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171710860805 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687920876017 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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