Some people believe that Young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. Do you agree or disagree?
People have different views on the suitable sanction for teenagers who have broken the law. While some argue that those young offenders need to suffer the same level of punishment as adults, I highly dispute with this idea owing to their age and there must be other solutions in this situation.
On the one hand, many people ague that no matter who you are, if you have carried out serious cime, you would be considered to receive an appropriate punishment. These punishment actually act as a deterrent to juvenile criminal as well as adult one against their re-offending. For example, a young murderer would not feel guilty and repentant for what they have already caused and would be likely to continue his misdeed if he was not given a severe retribution. As a result, this will be, of course, dangerous to the whole society. Furthermore, harsh disciplines including imprisoning are commonly thought to be effective in re-educating these people.
However, young people committing crimes appear to have convincing reasons that they deserve a lower punishment compared with the older. In fact, such is the age of young offenders early, such is their awareness and experience inadequate, that they are not really well-informed about the damage and consequence that involve in crime would cause to their community and themselves. Also, with the lack of intellect, they are not afford to distinguish what is bad or what is good and eventually this would lead them to illegal actions that they believe they are doing right. In addition, their ability to control emotion is not enough to get over the shock or mental disorder of being imprisoned, even when they come back to normal life after releasing. If they have to face prison and live in this environment, in the long run, they may adopt negative behaviors which could not only change their attitude in bad way, but also obviously lose the true function of prison.
In conclusion, young people committing crime should be give more chances to atone their fault and improve themselves instead of suffering such harsh punishment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this punishment' or 'These punishments'?
Suggestion: This punishment; These punishments
...d to receive an appropriate punishment. These punishment actually act as a deterrent to juvenile...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s appear to have convincing reasons that they deserve a lower punishment compared...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'afforded'.
Suggestion: afforded
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02305475504 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66252477825 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605187319885 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7776018052 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.076923077 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26694791777 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086721819709 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720380999119 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167859436835 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368762066791 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.