Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is some disagreement as to whether accepting a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is better than trying and improving such situations. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the attempting to overcome those bad is worth to support.
First of all, If people simply accept their life with unsatisfactory job or small abundance, they will face a great deal of stresses. Those things could make them uncomfortable because it's not their dream job and shortage of money keeps them faraway from their hobbies like shopping, traveling and etc. Therefore, they're likely to be just suriving but not living, the result is unhappy life.
By stark contrast, people who put effort on trying and improving to get out of those suck situations, might have a colorful life that is worth to live. Admittedly, in the process of improving life, those could learn plenty of valuable lessons leading them to know how to appriciate and love people around them more and more. For example, on the path of following dream occupations, people could meet mentors or companions who support, give them advices or share hardest time. The more those around them, the more they don't feel alone anymore and might start to do these with others. In the end, if people could reach to the peak of success, it's absolutely best news ever, then they could live the life they want and start to enjoy it.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that people should have a breakthrough to get rid of thier safety zone that make them unhappy to gain the life they truly want to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
There is some disagreement as to whether accepting a bad situation, such as unsa...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... their hobbies like shopping, traveling and etc. Therefore, theyre likely to be just sur...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...shopping, traveling and etc. Therefore, theyre likely to be just suriving but not livi...
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Line 9, column 457, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'share the hardest'.
Suggestion: share the hardest
...nions who support, give them advices or share hardest time. The more those around them, the m...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e more those around them, the more they dont feel alone anymore and might start to d...
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Line 9, column 642, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ple could reach to the peak of success, its absolutely best news ever, then they co...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'absolutely the best'.
Suggestion: absolutely the best
...could reach to the peak of success, its absolutely best news ever, then they could live the lif...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ife they want and start to enjoy it. By way of conclusion, I once again reaff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85815602837 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55423786675 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59219858156 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.390430235 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 124.545454545 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201974479301 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862433675371 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139110248881 0.0667982634062 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139964110946 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135033380809 0.056905535591 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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