Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is true that there are conflicting views about the lifestyle of youngsters. While a number of people believe that it is necessary to follow traditions of cultures, I would argue that youth should be free to make their own choice.
On the one hand, there are a number of reasons to support the idea that the young generation should continue to uphold traditional customs. First, since customs play a key role in embracing social identity, young people have the responsibility to preserve their conventional traditions. This might be explained by the fact that the traditional customs comprise the practices and principles which have been put together by the past generation. As a result, it reflects society’s long-standing values and standards. Second, by adhering to the established customs, young people will have a secure foundation for their own future. This means that previous generations were able to flourish in the past, people in this day and age only need to follow these traditions to save themselves from unnecessary error and trial in life.
On the other hand, I would be inclined to argue against this as I believe the reasons to support the young’s decisions in having their own ways of life are also significant. To begin with, some of the cultures are obsolete or even oppressive in the modern world. For instance, the gender imbalance and misogyny in Viet Nam have been eradicated owing to women’s growing awareness and demands for freedom and respect. Furthermore, it is undeniable that every generation wants to express themselves freely, and the young generation should be no exception. By making use of their energy and youth, they can have opportunities to make their mark in history.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better for the young to highlight themselves freely.
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also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08469055375 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8644425903 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560260586319 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.578599392 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332690769293 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102174015247 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790272105936 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200000051268 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708196491226 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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