Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

A large number of people perceive that adding several numbers of sport center for the public purpose could improve citizen health. However, some of the other people argue that other measurements should be taken into account on the effort to increase public health. This essay will argue that providing sports center would increase public health and give the concluding views.

On the one hand, one of the most effective methods to improve health is by doing exercise regularly. Therefore, some of the people believe that to improve the health of the people in the society should be done by adding some of the sports facilities for public-purposed since not all people could afford either going to the gym or buying some of the fitness equipment by themselves. Taiwan, for instance, provides several numbers of sports facilities in every region. As a result, several studies have shown that the general health of taiwan citizen is highest compared to other Asian countries.

On the other hand, people assume that to improve social well-being is required not only sports facilities but also health awareness. If the government increased the number of public sports center but the citizen unaware of one’s health that will be meaningless. Moreover, there are several other activities should be taken into account to keep up body condition, such as consuming balanced diet food, avoiding stress and having enough time to sleep. So, one’s health condition could be maintained and social well-being would be improved significantly.

In conclusion, I believe that the availability of sport center would not sufficiently influence people health as another measurement such as health habit also has a bigger impact on one’s body condition.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...fford either going to the gym or buying some of the fitness equipment by themselves. Taiwan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30215827338 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68138144027 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503597122302 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0096296283 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.833333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348840394123 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151411286407 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762059092177 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241133461349 0.151304729494 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957068747681 0.056905535591 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.