Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is no denying that health plays a critical role in human and society life, posing various questions about how to enhance public health. While some think the construction of new sports centers is the most effective response, I think it will be better to take other measures into account.
There are several advantages to the community from the athletic infrastructures that they offer. First, doing exercises can enhance workers' productivity by helping them release stress and improve their physical health. As life is modernizing, people's jobs are no longer require to move around. Either a chair or a laptop or computer is enough for them to do their work. However, this lifestyle may lead to negative health outcomes like stroke, diabetes. Fortunately, these effects can be avoided by playing sports. Secondly, playing sports can increase the communication levels between employees and employers. For example, to win a competitive sport, apart from having excellent skills, players must stay in contact with others to make a strategy or a plan and carry it out fluently. This idea can be seen clearly in soccer, basketball, or volleyball.
On the contrary, other methods, apart from increasing sports facilities, should be mentioned as an efficient means of improving public health. Some people spending lots of time playing sports but yet they still get some health problems. This can be explained by the consumption of junk foods, which have enormous quantities of calories and require a great deal of time to burn them. Another factor that attribute to the statement is the modern lifestyle, as they tend to have less time doing exercises due to the pressure of working at the workplace. Furthermore, the born of new technologies such as smartphones, laptops, PC seems to make humans lazier compare with them in the past.
In conclusion, while building new athletic centers is an effective way for public health change in a positive way, having a healthy diet, and spending some time technology isolating to go outdoor is worth to be considered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'moving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: moving
...ing, peoples jobs are no longer require to move around. Either a chair or a laptop or c...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... effective way for public health change in a positive way, having a healthy diet, and spending so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, apart from, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1369047619 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78906366614 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3117770889 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.529411765 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264607409208 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074499882398 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590510298651 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166621954409 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194303215198 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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