Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this modern world where technology has increasingly developed, all aspects of life are likely to be affected, especially in terms of health. The sedentary lifestyle is becoming more and more popular, and the government has been trying to cope with this by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, suggest that this may not be an effective method and other solutions should be taken into consideration. This essay will outline some supporting points for both ideas and finally give my point of view.
To begin with, providing more sports facilities may create a positive impact on the health of citizens. Many people do not want to exercise due to the lack of proper equipment, and that travelling to sport centres would be too inconvenient. By putting more exercising machines in public places such as parks, they will be more encouraged to do physical exercises and as a result, improve their health. What is more, since such facilities are free to use, people tend to be more willing to get their body moving. What I mean is that, since most gyms and sports centres offer the most up-to-date things but at a relatively high price, people will not actively go to these places, and the offer of those free ones will act as a stepping stone to motivate them to improve their well-being.
On the other hand, others argue that this alone may not be sufficient and other measures are needed. This is true to a certain extent, on the grounds that many people are still not aware of the importance of exercising and their influences on the body. Therefore, government and local authorities should try to raise public awareness of the problem first, as this is the defining factor which leads to the problem. Additionally, public contests such as marathons or cycling races might work well, since they create a sense of competitiveness. In simpler terms, people will feel as if they are heading towards a certain goal, and this could significantly improve the public health.
In conclusion, I believe that creating more sports facilities to meet the demand of the public is definitely a good solution, but the effectiveness will be even higher with combined with other measures which are mentioned above. Should we successfully carry out these plans, the public health will be considerably improved.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97686375321 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73126538463 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550128534704 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8120827752 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.875 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26284974999 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893747750258 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429415197093 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167725682696 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345759099242 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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