Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, opinions are divided regarding whether the development of the economy would be the sorely way to eliminate starvation and poverty or would detrimentally affect the environment. Although economic expansion could bring several harmful impacts on nature, I am in favour of the idea that economic prosperity plays a vital role in addressing the deprivation of food and money of societies.
On the one hand, there are grounds to believe that preventing economic growth is necessary since it could exacerbate the poor condition of the environment. First and foremost, it is undeniable that activities of industrial zones, which are dispensable in economic revolutions, often lead to severe air pollution. This is because activities of these zones necessitate the combustion of fossil fuel, consequently a high concentration of carbon dioxide is discharged into the atmosphere. Moreover, chemical contaminants and rubbish of factories released into water could significantly harm seas, rivers and marine animals. Some marine animals could not differentiate between garbage and their food; therefore they might consume the trash, causing devastating influences on these animals’ health. Meanwhile, toxic chemical liquid might be the main factors for the mass death of fishes in some areas.
On the other hand, I advocate that economic growth is one of the most effective ways to tackle famine and poverty. Firstly, enhancement of the economy elevates people out of joblessness; therefore people could afford their basic living expenses and put an end to starvation. When the economic sector thrives, there is a larger demand for laborers, which, in turn, could generate more job opportunities. Secondly, a wealthy economy greatly contributes to the government coffers which could ease the shortage of food and money. In fact, enormous national budgets enable authorities not only to conduct welfare schemes that supply food and money for the underprivileged but also to provide free education which helps the needy to gain knowledge to have better jobs. That would make them alleviate the financial pressure and avoid becoming hungry.
In conclusion, while the development of the economy has some negative impacts on the environment such as worsening air pollution and destroying rivers and seas. I am in favour that economic improvement should be continued to deal with famine and poverty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52032520325 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96142109617 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6832275023 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.3125 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178852768082 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532868014196 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474815030047 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106623215187 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015315742235 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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