Some people say that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
While some people contend that a large number of nations attending business and cultural contacts would lose their characters. I am of the opinion that trading between nations about business and culture is a positive progress.
On the one hand, I would agree that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development because of some reasons. The first reason is that business contacting could create a wide range of job opportunities for local people, which helps improve their living standards and boost the local economy. KFC, for instance, a company established by many countries, has provided thousands of jobs for people living in my city, which has helped them increase their income and live more comfortably. Another reason is that increasing cultural contacts between countries will help people have a deeper understanding of other cultures. This means that they would avoid some situations which are relevant to culture shock, tension and conflict.
On the other hand, there are some reasons why others think that many countries will lose their identities. Firstly, this trend could cause a serious threat to cultural and traditional values of a nation. For example, the appearance of various fast food restaurants has altered the eating habits of Vietnamese people and their attitudes towards the importance of a family meal. This might make them no longer respect family meals as the way their older generation did in the past. Secondly, some traditional beliefs are also greatly changed by this trend. Same sex marriage is a case in point, these days, many people accept same sex marriage which was socially unaccepted in a few decades ago.
In conclusion, although some people think that having business and cultural contacts between nations will make them loss its characters. , I personally believe that this trend would have a wide range of benefits to countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
While some people contend that a large number of nations attending business and cultural...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'positive progress'.
Suggestion: positive progress
...n nations about business and culture is a positive progress. On the one hand, I would agree that i...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ons will make them loss its characters. , I personally believe that this trend wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26470588235 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63337270939 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552287581699 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8342364411 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.4 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358988450228 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127725774213 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114261990559 0.0667982634062 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221292504975 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055874111273 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.