Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is positive development while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, the era of globalization has given us many opportunities to reach out to diverse cultures around the world. There are many opinions that this is a good opportunity for the economic development of the country as well as to expand the customer base globally.While there are still many opinions that this may cause cultural identity to gradually lose.In my opinion, I think that business and cultural exchanges between countries certainly have more benefits than disadvantages.

On the one hand, business expansion and cross-cultural communication are a positive feature of contemporary life.Firstly, the increase in the number of foreign companies investing and headquartered in developing countries has provided employment prospects in both rural and urban areas.For example, many Japanese factories have set up factories in Vietnam, especially Toyota Motor Corporation, which is a Japanese multinational automobile manufacturer, this has solved 48% of the problem unemployment rate in Vietnam in 2000.Secondly, thanks to globalization, national and local tourism is promoted, the quality of life of local people is significantly increased thanks to the huge revenue of international friends.Furthermore, local crafts and dishes imbued with national culture and national culture can be spread to the world and offer the potential for comprehensive development.

On the other hand, it would be an exaggeration to assume that these developments might lead to the loss of national identity. In fact, the indigenous people in the areas have accepted the change from the integration, but they still proudly preserve the traditional cultural beauty.For instance, in the ancient town of Hoi An, which is a famous tourist destination both at home and abroad when it comes to Vietnam, here the houses that have been built have a little beauty of old French architecture but are special the traditional and bold features of Vietnamese houses have always been preserved and preserved to this day.
Moreover, this combination is also the way that Vietnamese people promote and develop the traditional beauty of the people of this country in welcoming foreign visitors to visit every day.

In conclusion,I would contend that a process of integration has encouraged various benefits rather than drawbacks. The growth of contacts in commerce and culture will never destroy

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54820936639 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26628838541 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578512396694 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.2975951904 222% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 262.030502757 49.4020404114 530% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 251.75 106.682146367 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.375 20.7667163134 218% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.5 7.06120827912 375% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268873897784 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103950226614 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081182396313 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130961343566 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727151181667 0.056905535591 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.4 13.0946893788 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.88 50.2224549098 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 11.3001002004 205% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.8 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.74 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.1190380762 198% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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