Some people say that men are naturally more competitive than women To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people say that men are naturally more competitive than women.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some hold the stereotypical belief that females appear less competitive by nature than males. Although this notion seems to have certain rationality, I am inclined to argue that both sexes can be equally naturally dominant.
On one side of the argument, some people believe men naturally hold more power than women. Initially cited to back this dominance up is evolution. In primitive societies, where humans lived harmonically with fairness and equality, men primarily took responsibility as hunters, while most women were willingly in charge of the gathering. In other words, males tended to be pugnacious, and females grew to be nurturing, proving that men have been more competitive than women since early times. In addition, as a potent foundation for this dominance, the patriarchal system formed and had centuries of global coverage, even virtually eliminating matriarchal society. As a result, women tended to be demanded to take a back seat, which still exists in today's times. For instance, in some low-intellectualized regions, if a woman is openly ambitious, her actions might still receive little respect.
Nevertheless, I do not think these arguments mentioned stand up to scrutiny since I am of the opinion that males and females, in essence, can be equally competitive. Most importantly, it might be because modern society has witnessed modern women rapidly progressing in their professions and personal lives. In detail, thanks to the fights for women's equal rights, more females have obtained higher education and more work opportunities. Many can even become billionaires with net resources as high as their male counterparts, generally improving the authority of women. Furthermore, a growing number of men, by contrast, are ready to be stay-at-home househusbands and responsible for domestic duties to support their wives to be externally employed. This development can encourage women to pursue their ambitions, letting them show their competitive facet to fulfil their lives.
In conclusion, although the idea that males are naturally more competitive than females can be true to a certain extent, I would state both genders can be equally driven as men to hold dominance.

Votes
Average: 9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4110787172 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08096095021 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603498542274 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7449810405 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23874760126 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814575201158 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873685504495 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155099782876 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041783428184 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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