Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that music can play a crucial role to gather people from other countries and with different age groups around; however, others did not think so. I agree with the former group because the national parade and concerts have proved it many times.
It is argued that music cannot bring people together because music taste changes over a lifetime. It means that people in every stage of their lifespan have a special taste in music, so it is highly unlikely that an elderly person and a juvenile both listen to a kind of music. However, it is possible and not far from the mind that people with gross disparity ages have a shared taste in music. For instance, by looking at the comment section of Metalica band music on most music store websites find out that there are many adoring fans of one typical type of music gathering in a social hub.
On the other hand, music has shown its potential to gather quite different people many thousand times. It is a tradition that is composed firstly the national parade of each country before the match starts in the world cup competitions. Spectators come from different countries and different ages but sit around each other for watching the match. In addition, the concerts prove that music changed the stereotypes. For example, there are many people coming from far-off places to enjoy the live show, and also the variety of ages is quite interesting.
In conclusion, music has a magical power to gather people from different cultures and ages, and as above-mentioned reasons are suitable signs to conclude this premise.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84132841328 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40397903654 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568265682657 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6374333462 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305716598482 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117088601309 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708809609568 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187589779972 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260286590024 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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