Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
It is obvious that music industry nowadays is more and more developed globally, helping improve human being’s sense of entertainment. To a certain extend I agree that people of different cultures and ages could be brought together through music; however, I also believe that music could bring about much more merits for users.
On the one hand, I agree that music can bridge the cultural gaps between nations and tackle ages boundaries. First, music is not only a stress buster, but also the instrument bringing people in various countries closer with pleasant rhythm or exploring beat. To use a common example of this practice, Despacito, the Spanish song, has been reach and covered by different singer around the world, regardless of their understanding. Second, the fact show that music could be able to bring various ages people together, which meant that it could break the ages boundaries. If the old and the young have the same type of music like pop style or jazz style, for instance, they will be easy to catch up on gossip or communicate together. Moreover, it is clearly to see that more and more people enjoy music on the dance floors, dancing and chatting each other regardless of their ages.
On the other hand, I also believe that music might bring far more benefits for those who is interested in. One of main advantages is that music is a stool for relaxing and delighting. Lots of students who are under academic pressures take advantages of music to ease their stress and release their pressures as well. Thus, without music, people could be prevented from enriching their knowledge and broadening their horizons related to art and entertainment field. It is no doubt that music is the fastest way boost students’ creativity, communication and productivity. For example, some songs with soft rhythm can help children focus on their tasks and reduce their mental paint.
In conclusion, I believe that cultural and ages gaps could be filled by music. However, I also think that there are a wide range of merits music might bring such as reducing stress, boost users creativity and productivity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03098591549 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63225834056 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560563380282 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7510162434 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.625 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252884631532 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862898423951 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568170986912 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161434905128 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561247333384 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.