some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people feel that song is a means of binding people to different ethnic groups and ages. I totally agree with this opinion because music is a means of entertainment and relaxation.

The main reason why I believe songs bind people is because it is entertaining. A lot of people can easily relate with music irrespective of the language used because of its entertainment capacity, people dance and are excited whenever the music they love is being played. To illustrate this, I once attended a cross-cultural wedding and everyone who attended dance to the traditional music played.

Furthermore, another reason why I support the notion that music binds different people is that it relaxes. people tend to interact and relate better in a relaxed and conducive environment. For example, a friend who had a cross cultural wedding met her husband on the dance floor.

In conclusion,I completely agree that music is a binding force among people of different ages and ethnic groups. this is because it is relaxing and entertaining. Given this,music should be encouraged across all ages and ethnic groups.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 41.998997996 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 941.0 1615.20841683 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 181.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19889502762 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91235169152 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 176.041082164 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4601394188 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5454545455 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304411680804 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119274786094 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062591384237 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198436082587 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434524234489 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 78.4519038076 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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