Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is widely believed that music can act as a powerful means to connect people from all different ages and backgrounds. Having seen so many cultural and generation gaps bridged by music made me totally convinced that music holds such power.

The first reason is, unlike speech, music does not require its audience to understand the language to enjoy the songs, thereby allowing people who speak different languages to connect with each other. Not to mention, many songs hardly contain a word such as Moonlight Sonata by Beethoven or Kiss the Rain by Yiruma; yet they still manage to be loved by many people around the world. This has proved that music represents a universal language that everybody speaks and shares feelings.

Secondly, music has been regarded as the most effective means to convey emotions. Indeed, since ages, people have employed music to express their love, happiness, sorrow and even fear. It is not exaggerating to say that music is capable of expressing any emotion. Hence, for many cases, indirectly communicating via music is likely enhance the effects of communication.

Last but not least, senior generations and young people can understand each other better by sharing a common favorite genre of music. Nowadays, it is not strange to see young people keen on classical music as well as older people finding themselves dancing to new pop songs. It is because music has no limitations and it enables people of different ages to explore others’ generations’ likings and styles.

To sum up, music as an essential part of people’ lives around the globe, holds the power of bringing people together regardless of their backgrounds or ages by its abundance in emotions and limitless boundaries.It is widely believed that music can act as a powerful means to connect people from all different ages and backgrounds. Having seen so many cultural and generation gaps bridged by music made me totally convinced that music holds such power.

The first reason is, unlike speech, music does not require its audience to understand the language to enjoy the songs, thereby allowing people who speak different languages to connect with each other. Not to mention, many songs hardly contain a word such as Moonlight Sonata by Beethoven or Kiss the Rain by Yiruma; yet they still manage to be loved by many people around the world. This has proved that music represents a universal language that everybody speaks and shares feelings.

Secondly, music has been regarded as the most effective means to convey emotions. Indeed, since ages, people have employed music to express their love, happiness, sorrow and even fear. It is not exaggerating to say that music is capable of expressing any emotion. Hence, for many cases, indirectly communicating via music is likely enhance the effects of communication.

Last but not least, senior generations and young people can understand each other better by sharing a common favorite genre of music. Nowadays, it is not strange to see young people keen on classical music as well as older people finding themselves dancing to new pop songs. It is because music has no limitations and it enables people of different ages to explore others’ generations’ likings and styles.

To sum up, music as an essential part of people’ lives around the globe, holds the power of bringing people together regardless of their backgrounds or ages by its abundance in emotions and limitless boundaries.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, such as, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2924.0 1615.20841683 181% => OK
No of words: 565.0 315.596192385 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17522123894 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76163824256 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.318584070796 0.561755894193 57% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 905.4 506.74238477 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.052489686 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.96 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269502844004 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960392610707 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466263203254 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155638416227 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344357922616 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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