Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music plays an integral part to refresh our soul after the hustle and bustle pace of modern life and associate with some novel experiences. As a result, I completely agree that music can connect people in the world together despite the differences of cultures or ages.
Not only the language but also the culture is an intangible barrier to interact with foreigners or get along with the social community in other countries. Nevertheless, music comprises various vibrant rhythms depending on the types of music, which can stimulate the listener’s feelings regardless of the language. Based on the audience’s preference, some foreigners can be attracted and love the songs from other countries without understanding the lyrics. For instance, the Korean music trend is stretched out of its country to become the second most widely in the world. It is the boom of the music revolution in modern time so a lot of fans around the world particularly start to learn Korean and want to explore its culture.
Another interesting thing is that music can narrow the generation gap. It’s clear to see in term of intricate melodies with insightful writings that are expressed universal feelings of love, empathy, and positivity against the backdrop of a nation experiencing political and economic upheaval. Consequently, most of the special ceremonies especially the prize-giving events are taken place with the ubiquitous music to bond all people’s emotions of pride notwithstanding the generational disparity.
In conclusion, I believe that music is an essential unifier to alleviate the generational barriers as well as the cultural gaps in the cross-cultural relationships all around the world.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...onomic upheaval. His resilience against this pulses through his infectious music and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, still, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38139534884 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82264274406 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583720930233 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 506.74238477 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6496098421 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.7 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331325877081 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913267569584 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638929674044 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194366287214 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710676977835 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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