Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child’s development. However, others say that things like television or friends have the most important influence on them.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
While it is believed by some individuals that parents play the most important role in the holistic development of their children, others believe that friends and possessions like television have a huge impact on them. I believe that both arguments have some valid points which will be discussed in the further paragraphs; however, I agree with the former notion because parents are considered the major role models, who imbibe a habit of good behaviour in their children.
On the one hand, the most presumable reason why some people say that parents have the most vital impact on children’s development is that parents teach them all the behavioural skills in the initial days of their learning. In other words, parents instil all the essential habits in their children ranging from feeding, talking to behaving. Therefore, most children learn these skills effectively and continue to grow with learning at every stage of their life from their parents. In most families, for example, after the birth of a child, parents usually take care of their babies and continue to teach them all basic skills such as praying god and respecting elders from the beginning.
On the other hand, some homo sapiens opine that television and friends have a pivotal effect on the development of children. Perhaps, they say this because children minds are highly vulnerable and after a certain age they start following their friends and inculcate the things what they learn from watching several movies and TV programs in their day to day life. For instance, some children start performing fitness exercises to develop a healthy physique after being attracted to some renowned actor’s physiques on the television.
To conclude, although people may vary in their opinion as to whether parents or friends are helpful in the overall development of children, I consider parents to be the most essential guide in children’s life because they teach them all the skills which are indispensable for the children development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 56, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...though people may vary in their opinion as to whether parents or friends are helpful in the o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19692307692 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64883585013 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6246475043 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.9 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275139699 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128611891744 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893870752141 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176969731442 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413310997299 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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