Some people say that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing are more beneficial to children and therefore they need more of these subjects to be included in the timetable. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people say that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing are more beneficial to children and therefore they need more of these subjects to be included in the timetable. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, art education is becoming most important to make the carrier of one. A group of people think that to add the subjects such as drawing, singing, acting and innovative writing in school syllabus, it has many advantages. Why this type of subjects is important for students? I agree with these statements and benefits will be discussed in further ensuring paragraphs.

Firstly, by adding arts syllabus students feels energetic and much focused-on study. To illustrates this after a long study session sometime student feels bore and they can not give much concentration on study. So, by doing this their loved curriculum activity in break time so it can help to relieve stress. It works as stress busters.in this way students can give much concentration and motivated. Secondly, students can enhance their reading and writing skills. for example, one report suggests that 73% of students are good at drawing, they have good handwriting.

Furthermore, the students who have this type of hidden capabilities which helps to make a career in this art field. To illustrates this, these subjects are helping to develop their abilities such as acting and singing, in this way, they can earn telephone number figures and make their future bright. For example, a singer Arijit Singh, who is the best singer in India he is the richest singer in India.

In conclusion, I pen down saying that subject arts must be added to the school timetable because it helps to feel relax and develop basic skills. Moreover, it also helps to make a ones career and a bright future.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01915708812 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65429043309 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582375478927 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4315101163 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3333333333 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102053029924 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367336944475 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392078828753 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0731350987876 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415569739762 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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