Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
Start earning in the age between 13 to 19 , in their free time children it would be great opportunity to gain general knowledge, thought by some people. However, some believe that they do not need to be restless by working just after the school. In this essay will be discuss both sides. In my opinion there are more benefits of working along with studies.
To gain massive experience, work is most common thing. working for at least 20 hours a week is perfect for a student, in this they communicate with a lot of people this may help them to gain communication skills. For instantiate, my friend who is working in taco bell as a cashier for a long time at least 1 year he has become more fluent. For example, he can talk to any stranger without feeling hesitate. Further more, when a student earn a money he become more responsible and focuse about their future and he introduced to the real struggle which their parent did for him. Generally, by working they learn how to manage time and money. For example, a person earn 500 dollar in one month so he calculate all and make a plan for their whole month, where spending money is worth.
On the other hand, In this age mind rest is must as well as physically. How to rest mind? Well sleep is the best way to relief human's mind and by doing physical activities we can relax our mind. For example, students have a lot of stress of their school work even when they are at home, which is assignments. Moreover, they feel restless because of this which is not good for a growing teenager it would be brain causes.
In conclusion, to adapt knowledge teenagers should go for time work. However, there may be some drawbacks of it. Anyhow every coin have two sides so i think they can easily manage by their experience. It would be great idea study and work together but in limit by not only focusing on work, they shall keep it in balance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, moreover, so, well, at least, for example, i think, in conclusion, in general, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45244956772 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37556447597 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585014409222 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6822504191 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.25 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.35 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349358468081 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106364048842 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632322634708 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20898996691 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280926460553 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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