Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
With the increasingly fast development of virtual network technology, on-line newspapers are enjoying a greater popularity among people than ever before. Some people think paper-based newspaper may be no longer required. From my own perspective, I firmly agree with the argument.
In my opinion, the paper-based newspapers have lost their readers due to the dispersion of distorted news to the public. This can be largely attributed to the factor that the facticity and reliability of the printed news are often manipulated by news companies and the political parties, which leads to the consequence that the news received by audiences are often omitted deliberately. If the content on printed newspaper lost its functionality of informing the truth to the public, it makes no sense that paper-based newspaper should exist anymore.
At the same time, compared with the electronic information carries inducting e-news and live-news, printed newspapers are more inferior in conveying urgent news in time. The report about the explosion of Fukushima Nuclear Power Plant gives a vivid example here. It was the on-line news report broadcasted the accident immediately to the world that helped to protect a considerable number of people from being infected with radiation related diseases such as blood cancer and sterility. As the traditional newspaper printers usually consume a long period on collecting information and printing newspaper, it never reacts as fast as on-line newspapers. Therefore, it is reasonable to believe the paper information carries will disappear in the future.
In conclusion, from my point of view. I am in support of the idea that traditional newspapers are no longer needed in people’s life.
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Essay evaluation report
It was the on-line news report broadcasted the accident immediately to the world
It was the on-line news report which broadcasted the accident immediately to the world
It was the on-line news report broadcasting the accident immediately to the world
As the traditional newspaper printers usually consume a long period on collecting information and printing newspaper, it never reacts as fast as on-line newspapers.
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Sentence: This can be largely attributed to the factor that the facticity and reliability of the printed news are often manipulated by news companies and the political parties, which leads to the consequence that the news received by audiences are often omitted deliberately.
Error: facticity Suggestion: facility
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flaws:
1. better to remove those transition phrases. Duplicated content:
From my own perspective, I firmly agree with the argument.
In my opinion, the paper-based newspapers have lost their readers
In conclusion, from my point of view. I am in support of the idea that traditional newspapers are no longer needed in people’s life.
2. No. of Words: 267 350
for practice purpose, better to develop more content. around 300-350 words will be ideal. It is a must to give more content than average for those who want to reach 8.0 and over.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1424 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.333 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.949 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.653 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.041 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46816479401 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05243215919 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602996254682 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6603412907 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.307692308 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173881551651 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596919614988 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386889341371 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107971103409 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029366380148 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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