Some people say that young people should be encouraged to leave their home when they become adults. Other say that it is better if they remain with the family as long as possible. Discuss both the view and give your option.
We can see from the past that if all family members lives together then the bonding of the family becomes strong. Some people believed that when youngsters become adults, they should separate from their home. While, others think that they should live tougher with the family. In my opinion, I agree with the later view. I will discuss my view points in the following paragraphs.
The first and predominant reason in my opinion, behind young people ought to live with the family is nothing but the warmth, love and care they received from the family is undeniable truth of life. In other words they are guided and explained by the parents and grandparents when they have in critical situations regarding taking decisions of life. To exemplify this point we can consider the situation of youngsters that after school, what stream of studying they should choose for better future? With the help of parents and from their experience of life they can easily guide the children.
Furthermore, parents also get the support of their children at the later age of life. This means that both parents and children could help each other in difficult part of the life. What is more, living together also reduces the cost of living. For example, the cost of rent, electricity bill and other cost can be saved. Which help them to save more money and invest it in other business.
On the other hand, no one can deny the merits of young people who leaves their home when they become adults. Youngsters become more mature and independent to take their life decisions, which means that they are free to live their own life with their own rules and principles for living. For instance, in many western countries such as USA and Canada, most young people separated after their graduation from their parents and earn own money for living.
In conclusion, I believe that though there are benefits of living separately from parents, the arguments of living with family beats more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87462686567 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29077201935 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519402985075 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7470633935 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7222222222 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32158735625 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109064710648 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937278655028 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17757965835 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106178092528 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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