Some people store personal and private information online including banking contacts and addresses Is it a positive or negative trend

Storing personal information online has been on the rise for years thanks to technological advances. While this trend can put the stored information at higher risks to cyber-crimes, I believe this development is positive.
On the one hand, updating confidential data like addresses online can be vulnerable to cyber-criminals. It is not uncommon these days that hackers create links, covered with attractive figures, to lure people to click on. As a result, they lose their accounts without their awareness and the stolen information can be exploited for illegal purposes like financial fraud. For instance, thousands of Facebook users in Vietnam have been blocked permanently because they clicked on an anonymous link to sever their curiosity about the latest scandal at that time.
On the other hand, I believe the aforementioned drawback is outweighed by the benefits this trend induces. Firstly, the storing of personal information online facilitates a superior experience for online shoppers. This is clearly exemplified when people shop on e-commerce applications like Lazada. Because their identity information has been synchronized with their sign-in accounts by the first registration, the time-consuming data entry can be reduced. Therefore, the cyber shopping process is expedited, promoting an overall convenient customer experience. The second benefit of this trend is to mitigate security risks. Because the information is frequently stored in the most advanced security systems, devised and developed by the top software companies on Earth like Google, crime-criminals have trouble perpetrating numerous protective layers to steal one’s private information without his or her permission.
In conclusion, I reaffirm that although people can face cyber activities, storing information online is beneficial overall considering the benefits mentioned above to people.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82608695652 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15851436287 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615942028986 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7043947264 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.857142857 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220591154514 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791101028199 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685066479937 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148018324368 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527810614888 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.53 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.41 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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