Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
Recently there has been a heated debate over making adolescents to work while they are studying . despite the fact that many people totally condemn, this idea, I find it partly true. There are three main reasons why teenagers should get involve with a career nevertheless they are at school.
First and foremost, working while studying makes teenagers more self-confidant. According to a research which is done by prof. Hatami teenagers’ psychologist at university of Tehran, Children who are working during their school age, are 22 percent more independent than who are just studying. They are two times wiser than other children.
Secondly, having a job at some ages may help people to find an appropriate career in the future. Supporters of this idea believe that should people have work experience during their teenage, they will much more success to get a suitable job. Besides they have more time to test & fail many job opportunities in as much as they start to work at early ages of their life. Moreover, being employee while studying, teenagers get essential skills to adapt to society circumstances. In the other words, having a career, pushes students to expose to the realities of their society. Therefore it causes that process of adoption to new life to be shortened.
To conclude, although it is often said that adolescents should not work before they fulfill their studying, I strongly disagree with them. As far as I concern, having a job prepares youth to be a better member of society in as much as it helps children to get many skills, to find a better job in the future and to make them more self-confidant. let’s to encounter them to get a job as much as possible.
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206896551724 0.247107183377 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.191222570533 0.155533422707 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0783699059561 0.0946595960268 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0626959247649 0.0501214627716 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0689655172414 0.0437548338989 158% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122257053292 0.122226691241 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0470219435737 0.0403226058552 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74092600893 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0595611285266 0.0326793684256 182% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0595611285266 0.0861772015684 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0156739811912 0.021408717616 73% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0156739811912 0.011925033212 131% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1693.0 1933.35771543 88% => OK
No of words: 290.0 316.048096192 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83793103448 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341379310345 0.374742101984 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241379310345 0.28420135186 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172413793103 0.203846283523 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110344827586 0.137316102897 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74092600893 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.037074148 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558620689655 0.56093040696 100% => OK
Word variations: 57.9981005577 60.7387585426 95% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3333333333 20.7743622355 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4796251658 49.517814964 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.866666667 127.492653851 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7743622355 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.733333333333 0.814263465372 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.99599198397 175% => OK
Readability: 43.4712643678 49.1944974215 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.16504854369 1.69124875643 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26672766902 0.332605444948 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121032632483 0.102741220458 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.126191933083 0.0668466124924 189% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.543330618465 0.534860350844 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14477540645 0.148594505496 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102680401044 0.134430193775 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444125561053 0.0742795772207 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.291933716012 0.324371583561 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.167711859727 0.0638462369009 263% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166019298829 0.228012699653 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623090871536 0.058150111329 107% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.68436873747 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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