Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
Whether children should spend all their time at schools for studying academic subjects remains controversial. Some people think that school is the place for only studying, while others claim that schools should arrange time such that teenagers can work in a short time since children nowadays are lacking work environment knowledge. I entirely agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons.
It is, first, argued by some people that academic subjects for pupils at teenage more critical than work-based skills. They claim that these skills can be taught during working ages, while in general, pupils do not have enough time for studying to enter a high-rank university, which is the principal parents's expectation. However, there are no benefits to being exceptionally qualified if teenagers lack social skills and even do not know what to do in the daily life. By doing experience, even if it is only making the coffee or the cakes, young people will quickly learn work-based skills as well as social skills such as time management, communication skill, teamwork, and how to deal with people at all ages in the society.
Furthermore, some employers have recently suggested that there are more and more young people can graduate from a school or a university without any necessary tools to service in the world of employment. Having work experience demonstrates diligence and persistence in a real working context, which makes the students more employable. Besides, students can able to give a right decision in their plans and career for the future thanks to gaining experience outside of the schools. For example, one of my friend in high school decided to become a doctor instead of a secondary teacher as she planed before working as a volunteer in a hospital. So now, she is working in a big hospital with all her love and her persistence for her patients.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks to the idea of working experience like students might get distracted by work and not study, its benefits can not be denied. Schools, as well as pupils, should arrange a suitable timetable such that pupils can work a short time to gain experience outside of the schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...rank university, which is the principal parents expectation. However, there are no bene...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to work'
Suggestion: to work
... cakes, young people will quickly learn work based skills as well as social skills s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in general, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02739726027 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69041374885 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53698630137 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.3919332709 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.071428571 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393751942319 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127624673999 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733756766389 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231855629419 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748753628107 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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