Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, few people have considered that adults should spend their spare time doing unpaid work because this brings advantages not only to society but also to each teenager. From my point of view, I disagree with this view.
We are living in an era of socialisation, which requires a large amount of knowledge from teenagers. Therefore, teenagers often spend so much time studying that even a small number of them don’t have break time. So, spare time is a luxurious and valuable thing in teenagers minds, and they have less time to be concerned with their health. Hence, they consider time to be money; they only spend free time to maintain their health, such as taking a rest and taking care of themselves instead of doing other things outside. They believe that if they don't have time for themselves, what can they do for unpaid work? To be honest, adults have no time for unpaid work; instead, they get a large number of excellent achievements in study that are also beneficial to society.
Saying so does not mean teenagers do not do unpaid work. Actually, schools generally organise many outdoor activities for unpaid work, including planting trees, cleaning up trash around campus, and volunteering for people who are in difficult circumstances. There is a problem that some people require adults to do one in their spare time, which is quite unnecessary because adults do it at school and they should spend valuable time more usefully on other essential things and many future plans.
To summarise, unpaid work is already done by teenagers at school, but doing more in their free time is quite redundant. Since they don't have much free time, let them do the things they want and love.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...n spend so much time studying that even a small number of them don’t have break time. So, spare t...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ings outside. They believe that if they dont have time for themselves, what can they...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...time for unpaid work; instead, they get a large number of excellent achievements in study that ar...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ree time is quite redundant. Since they dont have much free time, let them do the th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86301369863 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45000679761 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558219178082 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4577508575 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.230769231 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372581211278 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150367002574 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752059513761 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25036510577 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251006933873 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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