Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that it should be mandatory for the young to engage in voluntary work to support those who are in need. While this practice may cause several problems relating to wasting valuable time and the exploitation of the young, the overall impact is tremendously positive.
The disadvantages of requiring young people to take part in unpaid jobs are in plain sight. The main reason is that these activities consume a great deal of time. Undoubtedly, they have to set aside their free time to learn about the procedures, regulations, and essential skills so that they can be qualified enough to provide aid to other people in their community. If it is obligatory for those whose schedules are hectic to join in voluntary activities, they would likely lack sufficient time for rest and relaxation, leading to some mental issues such as stress and depression. Second, young people can be taken advantage of by participating in voluntary activities. In fact, numerous for-profit organisations may exploit them to cater to their own benefits. For example, Thanh Cong, which is a Vietnamese food company, used to ask young participants to distribute flyers to raise public health awareness, but they actually contained advertising messages for their products with the aim of promoting their sales instead.
Despite the negatives mentioned above, the benefits of encouraging young people to help their fellow citizens are more significant. One of these is that it can enhance their moral development. This is because helping others enables young people to understand the predicaments of people in need, such as the disabled and the poor, and acknowledge their struggle to overcome difficulties, thus potentially becoming more empathetic citizens. Furthermore, this tendency is beneficial for the future careers of young people. To be more specific, recruiters nowadays appreciate candidates who take part in voluntary activities and contribute to their community since they are considered to have acquired hands-on experience as well as a spirit of dedication and responsibility. Consequently, they can gain better job opportunities as their resumes are filled with such work.
In conclusion, while there are some drawbacks to forcing young people to partake in charity work, such as wasting precious time and being taken advantage of, these are surpassed by the positives, including better morality and increased chances of employment. This is provided that schools and workplaces reduce the workload for young people so that they have enough time to join unpaid work to gain its benefits.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35207823961 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96161198631 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555012224939 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6897799027 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.764705882 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213271363102 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712355880005 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339121208657 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134076820162 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304548011372 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35207823961 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96161198631 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555012224939 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6897799027 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.764705882 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213271363102 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712355880005 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339121208657 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134076820162 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304548011372 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.