Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that art is a vital school subject for children. However, others think that it is time consuming for learning art at school. In my opinion, i am in flavor of art among subject to be taught as a subsidiary subject.
On the on hand, many think that learning art can improve children’s creativity, therefore it is considered by some that art is essential for their kids. At the momment, the average children in Asian countries are lacking of creativity in working and studying, which is an extremly serious problem. In this case, putting in art in school curriculum is believed to be the best way to solve creativity lacking in children. Besides, learning art is a key to reduce student’s strain after studying difficult subjects such as math, physics, etc.
On the other hand. Some students only focus on studying art and totally ignore other subjects, and it is believed by some parents that learning art is a waste of time. In addition, some parents think that it is more important to focus on learning subjet such as math and physics because their kids are able to get a high-income job if they are good at these subjects instead of art.
Finally, in my view, art could be considered as a crucial school curriculum for children in oder to improve their creativity, which is also believed as the most effective as well as the easiest way to do. However, learning art could be time consuming if students are too focus on it and ignore study other subjects. To my mind, art should be an optional subject for children at school.
In conclusion, art could be both a vital subject as well as a time-consuming subject for children at school in many cases. However, i believe that art should be taught as a subsidiary subject for students.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'to focus'?
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...could be time consuming if students are too focus on it and ignore study other subjects. ...
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Suggestion: focused; focussed
...d be time consuming if students are too focus on it and ignore study other subjects. ...
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Suggestion: and
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Suggestion:
...as a subsidiary subject for students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, however, if, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in many cases, in my opinion, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73139158576 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74468764928 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443365695793 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8166202033 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417974337751 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171191611739 0.084324248473 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957998327875 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274197544876 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821482422042 0.056905535591 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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