In this day and age, it is argued that it is necessary for the young to learn art in academic settings; however, others state that this subject is time-consuming. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my own perspective.
On the one hand, some people suppose that art is an important field for adolescents at school. When children start to have access to drawing lessons, they can learn how to combine colors to create the mixture color they desire as well as form a structure of a picture through squiggly lines. During this process, young people can develop creativity and intelligence that can be seen as the first step in perfecting the mind. According to research results from the University of Michigan, children who are exposed to the arts early have a higher probability of success in later life. In addition, this subject helps the youth orientate their future career because they find their true passion early and have much more time to carry it out.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that others are of the opinion that art is a wasteful subject. In particular, when a person is forced to do something that they are not interested in or agree with, they feel discouraged as well as prejudiced against it. Similar to art, students who are not gifted in the arts do not seem to have too much interest in this subject. Therefore, the inclusion of art in the curriculum puts children under more academic pressure, and at the same time does not bring too much learning effect for them. Besides, if fine arts are included, this means that students have less time for other subjects than in the past. Therefore, many parents think that their children cannot focus on subjects that will be more helpful to their children's future jobs.
To conclude, people possess different opinions about whether the schools should put art into curriculum or that would be a waste of time. However, I am inclined that the opinion of the students is the key factor before the school makes the decision to teach art in the school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, as for, in addition, in particular, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73033707865 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48774296146 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8751732021 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.266666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346824660101 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115655265802 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772170702592 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196179251151 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415453848201 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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