I strongly disagree with the statement that the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school to be successful in a future job.
Of course, the ability to relate well to people is very important. But it is meaningless to say the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
These days, the job market is very competitive, many companies need employees who have excelled in academic subjects. A career such as Microsoft hire excelled students who have a GPA of 4 . because these employees have a lot of knowledge that allows Microsoft to be successful. They also have many different skills and experiences that allow them to try new things and take a risk, this helps them succeed in their projects.
People participate in the most competition to learn teamwork as well as spend more time to interact with their family member and their friends because they believe that have a chance to learn the ability to relate well to people. Can relate well to people is one of the most important factors for success in a future job. Parents always try to increase these abilities in their children.
Imagine someone wants to work as an advertiser, he or she should communicate well with people to sell all products. They also should have a lot of knowledge to analyze the market. Of course, if he or she considers both factors. He or she will be a success in her or his job.
In conclusion, it is undeniable fact that the ability to relate well to people is one of the most important requirements for success in a future job but there is another requirement which is required for success in a future job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...re excelled students who have a GPA of 4 . because these employees have a lot of k...
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...excelled students who have a GPA of 4 . because these employees have a lot of knowledge...
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Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...excelled students who have a GPA of 4 . because these employees have a lot of knowledge...
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Suggestion: many
...rosoft to be successful. They also have many different skills and experiences that allow them ...
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...nt factors for success in a future job. and parents always try to increase these ab...
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... well with people to sell all products. they also should have a lot of knowledge to ...
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...lot of knowledge to analyze the market. of course, if he or she considers both fac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, of course, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64429530201 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63119531366 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463087248322 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.8536956993 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.461538462 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0563710976192 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0199327042717 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0224121203765 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0361721196646 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211872028334 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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