I strongly agree with the statement that it is enjoyable and even desirable for us to have a job where we work only three days a week for long hours. In my point of view, this issue has some advantages, however, some people may think it is not possible for them.
One reason for my fundamental agreement with the idea is that we have more days to spend with our family, we also have sufficient time to play with our little kids or to help them in their home works, and spent our time on another important task, therefore, I think we will happy with our family and will more express our emotion together.
The second reason why I agree with the idea is that we can have another job. I’m now in Iran, we are witnessing an unfortunate economic situation, so most people chose another job to obtain money, this helps them to pay their bills, However, the government should be established many jobs to satisfy their needs. For example, in Iran, some employees after their main job are taking passengers with their car.
Another reason, I believe that we have an opportunity to go on a long journey, we can relax and rest for a long time, therefore, this long journey allowed us to have the best performance in our jobs and focus on the task rather than pay attention to entertainment or spend our time to useless things. For example, some employees spend their time on social media or joking with their colleagues.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, may, second, so, therefore, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1165.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 256.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55078125 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41738179467 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5390625 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.1345898987 48.9658058833 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.625 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242230523461 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127745744737 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135362638832 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172998964932 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107594600738 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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