Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
These days, traffic jams have become a big problem in many communities and transforming parks and gardens into residential areas is the best way to solve commuting problems, but some people oppose such an idea. My view leans more in the direction that land near to centres should be made available for apartments.
Green spaces occupy a large area around our busy commercial and businesses and have grown in number over a long period of time, but some believe that if we construct new apartments near the main business hubs instead of leaving them as recreational grounds. For instance, workers would use less time commuting to work from distant residential areas. In addition, it would also allow professionals to easily walk a few minutes to their workplaces. Therefore, cars would reduce in numbers and ease would congestion. Furthermore, it can be argued that city centres are not perfect locations for parks, because of the hectic activity that surrounds them and those who work in the vicinity have little or no time to benefit from them.
There are, however, other people who hold different views and are not convinced by removing leisure areas form the heart of a town, or city would not be helpful. Their main consideration is the price of the land in looking at major cities around the world. For example, London, Tokyo and even Beijing provide clear evidence that building apartments in busy centres are likely to attract very high prices which most commuters could not afford to buy. Hence, such a policy would not the change current situation.
In conclusion, relocating parks and gardens may offer a reduction in people's daily commute, despite some doubts about whether it works or not, but both sides have valid concerns about the present situation. However, on the whole I would favour building moderately priced residential apartments rather than open spaces intended for leisure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, as a result, as well as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6914893617 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56061028152 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.659083311 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25015432814 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715012880519 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632651074879 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145544446647 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444242380235 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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