Some people think that children should be encouraged to travel more while at school to broaden their experience. Other think that not enough time is spent in the classroom learning basics of a good education.
People’s opinions differ as to whether or not schools should have trips for students besides indoor classes. While there are those who may argue that time should only be used to study indoor to ensure the quality of education, I believe that travelling has an important role to play in children’s knowledge accumulation process.
There are a number of reasons why some people hold the opinion that school children should only focus on fundamental subjects taught in school. One reason is that in order to participate in field trips, students have to cut their time learning subjects at school. This in some cases would have a negative effect on the academic results. Another reason is that the daily study habit of children could be interrupted by occasional travelling. As it is crucial that learning process is maintain on a continuous basis, spending two or three days on an expedition means that school children may forget the knowledge they learnt before and would need some time to review after coming back, which is a waste of time.
Despite the aforementioned arguments, I it is seem to me that field trips are valuable opportunities for children to explore the world. Through travelling, children experience and learn things that cannot be obtained in classroom environment. While school subjects mainly provide students with theories and principles, trips outside school giving children practical approachs are perfect supplements. For example, while visiting museums and ancient vestiges, children not only are instilled a sense of national pride and patriot but also consolidate their knowledge about history they learnt at school. Moreover, travelling stimulates children’s intellectual development and creativity.
In conclusion, although it might seem sensible that children spend their time on the basics taught in classroom, I personally prefer they spend an amount of time travelling to explore the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
... it is crucial that learning process is maintain on a continuous basis, spending two or ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'seemed'.
Suggestion: seemed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44224422442 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91125402795 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8418095365 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.846153846 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301483750303 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104272470162 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439233506041 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180995395828 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219192704489 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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