Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison, so as to reduce the crime rate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is considered by some that people who commit crimes should serve longer terms in prison to decrease the crime rate. In my opinion, I agree that extending the prison time could be an effective measure. However, I also believe that education and vocational training should be applied simultaneously to tackle criminal issues.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why putting criminal into prison for longer terms could reduce the crime rate. First, because imprisonment acts as a deterrent, extending the time in prison could make more people who intend to commit crimes less likely to actually perform illegal acts. For example, more people could give up their illegal intention when they aware that such a criminal act will curtail their freedom. Second, sending serious criminals in prison for longer terms, the authorities will have more time to re-educate them, which is to ensure they would not return to crimes after being released back into society.
On the other hand, education and vocational training could be a practical method for lowering the crime rate. The first reason is that since many people become criminals due to the wrong perception of the law, education could help them to be able to distinguish between legal and illegal actions so as not to carry out illegal acts again. The other reason is that vocational training equips criminals with reasonable and sufficient knowledge, which enhances their likelihood of getting a job to earn money without working illegally for it. If they can not get a job, they will easily commit crimes again to make ends meet.
In conclusion, while I agree that the crime rate could be reduced if prison terms are increased, I believe that education and training should also be applied to deal with criminal problems.
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... act will curtail their freedom. Second, sending serious criminals in prison for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03378378378 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46734516922 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537162162162 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0543673585 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.166666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307473592855 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134303915644 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101984869513 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236226441201 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090749498265 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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