Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Cultural traditions are losing their original charm and even heavily damaged due to the exploitation of money-making attractions in tourism. Others, however, think that it is an ideal way to preserve these traditions. In my opinion, while the trend of utilizing cultural traditions for tourist purposes perhaps serve as a mean of protection, I believe that this could pose a problem to its diversity and existence.
According to some people’s perspectives, exploiting local cultural traditions for tourism is the best way to save them because governments annually invest their budget in different works including development and refurbishment in order to preserve these traditions. For example, Hanoi is famous for its ancient towns and house structures for many years, and to prevent them from running down, a great deal of investments has been introduced to rebuild and retain original factors. Not only is this good for the conservation of this city, but it also helps attract a lot of people’s attention, coming from all sorts of background and willingly paying for visit purposes.
Apart from the reason expressed above, I believe that this trend would pose a threat to the diversity and existence of traditional and cultural values because of the bad <span class="headword hdb tw-bw dhw dpos-h_hw "><span class="hw dhw">consciousness</span></span> among people. They often litter trash, take photographs without permission and break artifacts. For example, the first university of Hanoi is famous for many turtle statues with the stone-made board on their back, which are used to record the achievement of students in the past. Even though this place is a great economic source of Vietnam since it has been commercialized, the turtles’ heads, however, are now heavily damaged by tourists, constantly touching them to gain luck.
In conclusion, although some people think that tourism has done its best job in protecting cultural tradition to some extent, I, however, would argue that by the negative impacts made by tourists, these cultural traditions would be damaged or even destroyed in the long-run.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52567975831 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52825339628 2.80592935109 126% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592145015106 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8349885074 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.272727273 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0909090909 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236152480805 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955856841225 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863491336004 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163242360893 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815617757245 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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