Some people think that families have the most powerful influence on a child’s development, while others think that other factors such as televisions, friends, music, etc have the biggest effects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Without a doubt, children’s personal development is factored in by a host of aspects surrounding them. However, the question of which factor has the most impact on children has been a topic of debate. While a school of thought holds that the process of kids’ development is affected most by their families, others claim that something like televisions, friends, or music are the main aspects playing the most important role in the growth of children. Personally, I side with the latter.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some endorse the former view. The key rationale is that parents are always responsible for educating and caring for their offspring. In fact, if children are not taken care of, this may lead to the fact that they could become depressed and isolated in the process of growing because of the lack of affection from their parents. Furthermore, children would not know how to distinguish what is right or wrong in life and may behave unsuitably if they are not educated by their parents. For example, in light of the lack of parental care and supervision, no small number of children in Vietnam have become involved in criminal gangs, thereby going astray into the criminal paths. This is a testament to how the responsibilities of parents play an essential role in children’s development.
On the other hand, there are some reasons why some people advocate the latter view. The first reason is that a child’s personality can be changed by other factors like teachers, friends, and so on. For instance, a kid raised in disciplined families could become undisciplined if they play with peers who are harmful. Another reason is that television can cause some bad habits and behavior in children. In fact, although some children are educated by their families, they still take part in illegal acts like buying drugs or racing due to the fact that they watch too many violent films or unsuitable programs. Therefore, It seems reasonable why other factors can affect the process of developing in children.
In conclusion, while there are some justifications for claiming that families make a significant contribution to the development of children, I believe that other factors like friends, television, etc. are of no less involvement.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.072 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88192034742 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2612880671 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167851520871 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564575166868 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600510500966 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118968565773 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537703399231 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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