Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with.Use examples to support your ideas.
In this day and age, parental and peers’ impact on individual’s development have always become a controversial debate. While I think friends can have a certain influence on adolescents, I believe that family plays a more critical role on raising children.
On the one hand, it is less challenging and more comfortable for us to share everything regardless of happiness, sadness or studying pressure with our friends. That is because they live in the same generation with us so they can fully understand our feelings and feel sympathetic for what we have gone through. Therefore, the advice of friends are regarded to be more influential and practical than that of anyone else. For example, when it comes to finding a job, we have a tendency to ask for our peers’ help. Moreover, friends are the ones who have many things in common with us so their actions tend to influence intimately ours. One of the real-life instances is that when we see our peers and believe that what they are doing is cool and eventually we’ll have a desire to do the same things as they do.
On the other hand, I believe that family has a great impact on children’s life. First of all, family environment is the first educational one because in this family every child gets the first lessons and guidance from the elderly. As a result, individual’s personality can be formed through the way of education of family members. For instance, if any parents have a habit of imposing their thoughts and craving on their children, they will likely become a solitary rather than sociable person. Secondly, parents and other older members in family are literally experienced and mature so it is true that they know how to deal with some grueling situations effectively. Consequently, children have a tendency of asking for their advice and experience to get by any situations that they have not met before and in particular to make the best decision. Finally, family is believed to always welcome us in spite of how terrible we are. In fact, parents tend not to leave us when we are in trouble but be ready to help us as much as they can. Therefore, we can fix our mistakes and choose the right path to go.
In general, while friends are thought to have a positive impact on children’s development, I believe that family plays much more essential part on their life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, in general, in particular, as a result, first of all, in spite of, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77641277641 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7593570624 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501228501229 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1729852144 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7777777778 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833093579967 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313533957507 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347925700641 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0598907708541 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019569240243 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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