Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
It is argued that people think children suffer from obesity because of the negligence or wrong directions of government. I completely agree with the statement that government needs to be held responsible for this rising health hazard.
Firstly, the government's ignorance in controlling the available food items in the market is a huge contribution to obesity. It is the duty of the government to form proper framework and directions for food security and ensuring that those are followed. If the government fails in that, the impact will be visualized in the citizen's health. For example, when a parent gets a food for the child, he/she verifies the label, nutritional details and expiry date. The awareness of consumers stops there. It is the government's part to verify the genuineness of those food products. So, the incline of obesity in children is due to the denial of duty by public servers.
Secondly, government must take necessary actions to educate its population on healthy parenting. The government is obliged to confirm that necessary awareness on child growth and healthy lifestyle reaches everyone in the country so as to ensure that every parent knows what to feed their child and other details concerning its health, the failure of which may pose as one of the reasons for health issue, in other words, obesity. Many people who are not ready to become parent are tend to be one because of various circumstances. In such cases government's widespread awareness program can aid them in bringing up their child with nourished foods and hence avoiding obesity. Thus, government plays a major role in mitigating the rise of children's health crisis.
To summarize, it is the government 's duty to provide its people the right to choose the healthy lifestyle through controlling food markets and knowledge spreading. If there is a increase in number of children suffering from obesity, then the failure of government schemes and laws would be the reason.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...s rising health hazard. Firstly, the governments ignorance in controlling the available ...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...t, the impact will be visualized in the citizens health. For example, when a parent gets...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
...health. For example, when a parent gets a food for the child, he/she verifies the labe...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...festyle reaches everyone in the country so as to ensure that every parent knows what to ...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ts and knowledge spreading. If there is a increase in number of children sufferin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79013163021 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551083591331 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5873363607 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0625 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171911623886 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588724181071 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409830674615 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125707391211 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500050232425 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.