Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
The alarming rate of youngsters suffering from obesity has led to anxiety among parents and society. There are many views that put the blame on authorities for their ignorance and irresponsibility. While this can be probably true, I partly disagree the problems are attributed to children's family and friends.
To begin, there is no denying that the governments do not consider this issue important enough. First, fast food restaurants and other food-related plants for kids are not strictly mitigated. This can be explained by the high commercial profits gained from the food industry focusing on children, which enhances the national economy. Hence, the quality and ingredients consumed by kids will not be examined carefully. Second, there is a lack of lectures and proper education by authorities about stimulating food consumption for both parents and offspring. This can lead to unawareness about selecting food and diet for children's growth in society causing high rates of imbalanced and unhealthy youth.
However, I definitely argue that the increase of obese children is attributed to their families and surroundings. In terms of parents, attitudes toward restricting kids from eating high-fat products are concerned. For instance, in typical families where parents rarely spent time at home with offspring, children are unintentionally encouraged to search for junk food and street vents. Consequently, this gives rise to their appetites for unhealthy dishes instead of nutritional meals, and, obviously, prompts them to become addicted to processed food. Furthermore, in a schooling environment that contains seduction from friends, children can be easily adapted to rapid food products. As these packages include chemical conditions and toxins, they can probably begin overweight and have uncontrolled eating habits just because of having fun with their friends at school.
In conclusion, it is clear that the cause of the high percentage of obesity among children is not only the government's responsibility but also the kids' surrounding environment such as families or peers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57993730408 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00844093773 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.259695032 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.25 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156033690816 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512430000294 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0238261819053 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972372664239 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188083490405 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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