Some people think that the government should provide unemployed people with a free mobile phone and free access to the internet to help them find jobs.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Once my teacher told me that “you should know that free things are one kind of trap”. I also think as the same was, results may not be seen in the short term, but as time passes it becomes more obvious. For this reason, I am disagreeing with the statement that, providing free mobile and free access to the internet for unemployed individuals is not a helpful way. I have three reasons to support my opinion why I hundred percent disagree with free care from the government.
First of all, I vividly remember my graduation from my university, the weather was sunny and beautiful, but there was nervousness inside my head. The only thing that led to the feeling was a job. Then, there were plenty of ways to find a job which usually does not take a long duration. Luckily, the suitable occupation founded just within three months. This story of mine, illustrating that finding a career is only dependent on me, not others' charity.
Secondly, in the modern world, asking for help from others counted as one of the must-have soft skills. However, in the past, people had a belief that asking for help as pity-ness. Nevertheless, asking others to give hand on finding a job journey might promise an individual better chances of potential occupation. For instance, at my company, it is common to hire an individual that is known by other employees.
Lastly, As mentioned first, free things paths us to trap. If unemployed man provided by internet or mobile phone, he could stay all day wasting his time on games or social media and let himself in his comfort zone. This danger has a possible effect on his interest in discovering a work, or even in the worst-case scenario, the man would want more care from the government. Hence, it is better not to support free things as long as it is vital.
In conclusion, I believe that if someone truly wanted to find a suitable job, there is no need for free care from the government, it only depends on attempt and attitude.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
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...ree reasons to support my opinion why I hundred percent disagree with free care from th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6446991404 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56719133346 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587392550143 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0749990635 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0555555556 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3888888889 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278389889932 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775206076033 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894699550103 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138857114453 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10154741267 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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